Be careful of memorised sentences.
There are some IELTS teachers out there who tell students to write an outline statement after the thesis statement. To be honest, this is not a good way to structure the introduction. Outline statements are only for true academic essays that are many pages long, like you would write at university (IELTS essays are short discursive essays)
Another reason why I advise not writing them is that they look like they have been memorised. The examiner is looking out for memorised statements and sentences. You could lose points on this in task response and lexical resource. To put it simply, you have to use your own words. The IELTS examiners are looking at how you can use language naturally and coherently.
Examples of memorised or ‘cliche’ phrases:
In an introduction:
- I will argue both points and present my opinion.
- This essay would like to explore reasons for this and offer possible solutions.
- I will illustrate my view in more detail in the following essay.
- The following essay will outline more reasons why I hold this view.
- I will give reasons and argue my opinion in the following essay.
In a conclusion:
- The above points illustrate my opinion.
- As stated above these are the reasons for my view.
- In a nutshell, I think….
- All things considered….
I think you get the idea, these are not good to put in an IELTS essay. It is easy for a lower Band score candidate to just memorise these phrases and plug them into the essay. I have seen so many variations of these when I mark writing. It is better to do just 2 things when writing an introduction.
Paraphrase or restructure the task question.
Write a thesis statement (include an opinion if asked for)
After analysing the question and doing some planning, go straight into paraphrasing the task question in the introduction, then write a thesis statement (which includes your opinion if asked for)
For a lesson on paraphrasing click here ….For a lesson on Thesis statements click here..
An introduction should be under 55 words. Why? because it could just end up looking like a body paragraph, and you just do not have time to write a really long introduction. It is the same with conclusions…keep them under 45 words. The key is to keep introductions and conclusions short and concise. Use the body paragraphs to go into detail and explain your main points with examples.
Here is a recent example I saw with a memorised outline statement:
The impact that the growing demand for more flights has had on the environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people think that one way to limit the number of people travelling by air is to increase tax on flights…. To what extent do you think this could solve the problem?
It is argued that the increased in air traffic has a major impact on the environment. Some hold the view that increasing tax on air travelers can solve this problem. In this essay I will substantiate my views with relevant examples.
The text in red is the kind of thing that examiners will see as memorised and it will not be counted and could go against you.
This introduction below would be better:
The increasing need for air travel has had a negative effect on the environment, which is a cause for concern worldwide. Some people believe that taxing air travellers is a solution to reducing flights. I completely agree, because aeroplanes create large amounts of C02, and the building of new airports impacts local ecosystems.
The sentence in green is the thesis statement and contains reasons for the opinion.
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